I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Hollie You say a couple of times in your poem that you did nothing, but it sounds like you packed a lot of fun activities in your bubble during the holidays. My favourite line is "I drank water and other things a human would drink". It makes it sound like you are an alien who is holidaying on Earth and wanted to try the native drinks. I also like the way you've coloured your work to make it more appealing. Keep up the good work! - Mr Mitchell
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Hi Hollie
ReplyDeleteYou say a couple of times in your poem that you did nothing, but it sounds like you packed a lot of fun activities in your bubble during the holidays.
My favourite line is "I drank water and other things a human would drink". It makes it sound like you are an alien who is holidaying on Earth and wanted to try the native drinks.
I also like the way you've coloured your work to make it more appealing.
Keep up the good work!
- Mr Mitchell