I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
So this is my block buster adventure story right now . I haven't finished it yet but I only have the end to go. Its kinda hard to read but you can just click on the pictures and its easier to read
Hi Hollie Wow ... this really does sound like a blockbuster movie! I sounds like a cross between Jumanji, Mission Impossible and Indiana Jones. I love the way things are left at a bit of a cliff-hanger at the moment. Don't forget about using correct punctuation, especially when you are writing what people actually say. If what they is a new sentence make sure it starts with a capital letter (e.g. "Oh sorry ..." not "oh sorry ..."). I can't wait to see how it finishes! - Mr Mitchell
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Hi Hollie
ReplyDeleteWow ... this really does sound like a blockbuster movie! I sounds like a cross between Jumanji, Mission Impossible and Indiana Jones. I love the way things are left at a bit of a cliff-hanger at the moment.
Don't forget about using correct punctuation, especially when you are writing what people actually say. If what they is a new sentence make sure it starts with a capital letter (e.g. "Oh sorry ..." not "oh sorry ...").
I can't wait to see how it finishes!
- Mr Mitchell